“Your writing is very insightful! You have a solid thesis and a great argument to back it. I like the idea you proposed about narrative being something that is thought over and not created in the moment. I agree with this, as I also believe we contemplate important components of our lives before adding them to our internal narrative. Your argument stays solid throughout, however, I think something you could work on to make your claim even stronger would be to connect your claim sentences to your thesis more directly. I also think that by organizing your essay so that the link to the podcast is directly under where you mention it will be beneficial to the audience. Overall, you have a great argument and do a great job discussing it!”
