After rereading my essay with these terms in mind, I realized that I have the tendency to rely on pointing terms. I use the words “this” or “these” frequently. I also use transitional words quite a bit. However, they are on the weaker side, as I mostly use the word “but.” I believe by including some of the examples given in the reading to replace “but”, it can strengthen my essay. The area that I highlighted was an area that one of my peer reviewers pointed out. She mentioned that by adding an example, it could improve the idea I am trying to explain. I can utilize the transitional phrase “for example” to do this. 
